What do you think about this revised version of my rap?

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One punchline from a hardcore gangsta like me you'll get burnt, you suckers on yahoo answers was tripping on my rap so, I switched it up my game like a lowrider, stacks keep on getting higher and higher, on my right side in the seat got a honey, hopping this b!t(h!ng ride like a bunny, cuz no one at all can beat Cash-Flo Cash-Money, When it comes to rap, banging hot ish like my strap, in your @$$ I'll pop a cap, cuz I rap hard, repping da Vice Lord's and I walk da street, packing heat, Cuz I'm a straight up ''G'', just listen to my beat, Cuz I'm a Gangsta ''Yeah'' Cuz I'm Gangsta Rep 2 Dhere's suckers at Rousch Park be talking $h!t, yall suckers are a bunch of dueschbags, u ain't making da stacks, you suckers aren't local rappers on da radio, you dueschbags at Rousch Park can keep on motherflipping hating, while I keep on rapping on da radio, I got a hardcore gangster rap dhat Kess won't even play on da radio, I making money just listen to my loud stereo, you suckers at da park, you think you can beat my ''A'' Go ahead and try and even if you do Kess and his homie's will find a stupid cracker like you in less than a day, dhis ***** said, I can't rap, spitted one motherflipping punchline and didn't even hardly say nothing, all she was was just a motherflipping ***** fronting, If she would of said something real good, I would of spit something back, dhat would of been harder than a brick of crack, cuz I just do things, spit it, kill it, finish it, I don't care if you think my flow is whack, you talk alot of smack, you haters on yahoo answers, I hope all your pc's get viruses that are as bad as cancers, you can't beat me at rap and you can't beat me and moecheez cuz we kill it anyway, anyhow, we do it, cuz we killing it, cuz we're hardcore rappers!



Written By:Cash-Flo from Wild 96.3 C-Money4LifeWhat do you think about this revised version of my rap?
I think thats sick as anything, friggin awesome, keep it up cuz if you want you could probably make it big, i love to rap to so i definitely understand what your saying about all the haters , its all true



keep it upWhat do you think about this revised version of my rap?
woow took you a long time to type that down :P

Ye I'm diggin' t bro XDWhat do you think about this revised version of my rap?
what????

ok first off, it was horrible....sorry just being honest



there was no flow, weak rhymes and NO meaniful or even original content...



why do you mainstream rappers insist on copying something someone else has done? You sould like Dr. Suess trying to act ganster..



lastly, write your bars like this

so it does end up looking like one contiunes sentence

but keep spitting to gain your repentance

1.3/10
That's the **** mate







wateva u do keep to your dream and make it in the rap industry, don't ever let anyone tell u u don't have wat it takes coz u got skill so make sure the world heres and GO FOR IT!!!









I believe in u %100 brother